How good editing improves writing
Consider the following extract:
It was shortly after midday by the time we got to the airport the traffic having been terrible all the way. We went straight to the check-in desk after parking the car in the short-term car park even though we were going to be away for two weeks. But we were afraid that going to the long term car park would take too long because we had to take a bus to get there.
It turned out that the flight was delayed and that we could have parked in the long term car park after all. Simon even considered going back and moving the car but we didn't want to push our luck and decided to go ahead and check in instead.
We asked for and got two aisle seats next to each other as neither of us wanted to be either at the window or definitely not stuck in the middle.
Flying outside of Europe we were able to go to the Duty Free and stock up on some stuff for the long haul trip. We also got the dreaded Benson & Hedges for Rog even though he always says he is giving up.
As it turned out the flight was nearly half empty so there was a lot of seats free and we could of had as many seats as we liked.
Looking out of the window the Alps came into view but most people seemed disinterested in the view. It was only then the drinks trollie came round that they were awoken out of their slumber. Four hours later we landed and the holiday proper begun. Hopefully we will have a good time.